Revising My Hero's Journey

After reading through my first draft hero’s journey a week later and receiving input, I have decided of a few parts that need improvement. In the first section of my hero’s journey, I developed an “ordinary world” section. After rereading through my paper, I realized that this section could use a little more detail. In order to improve this portion of my paper, I will include a few more statements that specifically identify the characters. This way the reader can get a better sense of background for the rest of the story. One other portion of the story that needs improvement is during the transition period. When I first wrote my story, I thought that this portion of the story was less important and so I put very little emphasis on improving it. However, now that I have read through my work again, I realize that I left the reader wondering about what really happened in this section. In order to improve this, I could edit or rewrite the section so that it either reveals more details or creates a smoother transition into the later parts of the journey.
Although my first draft did need some improvement, there were parts of the story that I am proud of as well. My favorite aspect of my story is the caterpillar. When I began my brainstorming on how to begin my paper, I was having difficulty finding a method that would grab the reader without jumping right into the journey. Then, I remembered the pet caterpillar I had a child. Although this story takes place over eight years, and caterpillars/ butterflies do not live more than one or two, I thought it would be interesting if the caterpillar remained with me throughout my journey. The reason why I like this aspect is because the caterpillar in many parallels my life, and the changes that occur during the story. One other part of my story that I liked was the ending. I tried to create closure but instill a sense of continuation in the reader. After all, I ended claiming that I was about to begin my next journey.